miss nosy bird
It was a day out in the farm lands. The clouds looked like candy floss and the sky looked like blue berry fizzy the sun looked like a yellow highlighter it was about 50 degrees and the sun had started to burn blue and he could feel water under his arms then out of nowhere he tasted a hand
He looked to his left his face went from blue to red and saw that Sky had slapped him right on the beak. He thought it’s time for some pay back. So he did the same thing that Sky did to him. After that he said “how do you like the taste of a hand” then a short while later a whole entire flock of birds came.
And they were all fighting then they heard the most weirdest squick ever and it acephaly sounded govy they had sow what it looked like. than one made a face then they all made a weird face. Then they moved away from the govy bird then they all started to whisper to each other and then the bird had flown down and had gone write in the middle of them.
And had made the power line go down they all started to yell out “get off “ then the two right next to the derpy bird pinched the derpy bird. And the derpy bird fell off. Then the one on the left pecked his toes and then the two in the middle had a plan, they kept pecking his toes.
The one next to him done it at the same time then all of them started to encourage them. Then the one who first started had seen that they were very close to the ground. He told everyone else and they all said to stop then they squashed the two that were pecking the derpy bird’s toes.
And they
Looked down and said“oh my muffin “ write after he said that they went flying into space and after that the derby bird landed. Upside down and when it got back up it saw that it was
raining feathers then one of the bird’s. Had lost all it’s feathers and got inbarest really bad then the derpy bird looked closer and laughed out so much that he couldn't stop laughing. Then grabbed a leaf and gave it to the little bird it then covered it self then so many of them came down and hid behind the derpy bird. One got kicked out but hopped back in.
The end
Hi Bella,
ReplyDeleteAt the start of your story, it was really good what you said, The clouds looked like candy floss and the sky looked like blue berry fizzy. That really good. But when I kept on reading it, it didn't make scene so try again and make your story make scene. Anyway I liked your story. Keep it going.
Hey Bella your story was really good but like anneleise said it didn't really make to much scene but I did in joy reading it but next time get someone to read it and edit it before you publish
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ReplyDeletehi bella your work is really good
ReplyDeleteHi Bella, I like your writing it's really interesting. I would always read it but next time can you put full stops and commas because when I was reading it I got out of breathe.
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